From: Petra (petralemaitre@gmail.com)
Date: 08/19/2008 |
I'm stuck on the beauty of the last line and the art of your Turnbull and Thatcher. I know I just read a charming romance, too, but the screwball aspects are truly art.
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From: Luzula (luzulae@gmail.com)
Date: 01/29/2008 |
Oh wow. I enjoyed this so much, every line of it. You have such a gift for finding the right turn of phrase.
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From: Nos4a2no9
Date: 01/09/2008 |
Joan! This story was fabulous! Great Ray voice, and as always your characterization for both guys was spot-on. Those metaphors! The dialogue! Fraser's insecurities and self-denial, and Ray's decision to (unhappily) forget about it, even though he can't! You write these characters so, so well, and thank you so much for contributing to dSSS. I loved this fic to tiny pieces.
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From: Berty
Date: 01/09/2008 |
Oh, that was just HEAVENLY! Perfect Ray. And Dief helping out with the decorating! *adores*
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From: ubixtiz (winged_child_hiding@yahoo.co.uk)
Date: 01/08/2008 |
This is very cool. Your Ray voice is excellent here, and I really enjoyed this spin on how circumstances might have stood.
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From: nagasvoice (nagasvoice@livejournal.com)
Date: 01/08/2008 |
Oh boy, this is nice. Came over on an lj reccie from china_shop. Thank you for posting it, it made me feel better!!
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From: spuffyduds (spuffyduds@gmail.com)
Date: 07/05/2007 |
This was SO good! A funny, peppy, wonderful Ray voice. And I most especially loved: Fraser jaywalked. HEEEE!
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From: woolly_socks
Date: 06/23/2007 |
This is just gorgeous! Wow, there are so many of your stories I haven't read yet. It's great, I have loads of yummy treats saved for later. oxoxo
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From: _inbetween_
Date: 06/21/2007 |
So very cool; highly enjoy your writing.
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From: Lucifercircle (Luciferofthecircle@hotmail.com)
Date: 01/08/2007 |
The last line made me snort with laughter. And your Ray K voice is excellent. Fraser's behaviour is very believable.
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From: Amy
Date: 01/03/2007 |
I loved this *so* much! I have such a big thing for Fraser and Ray dancing around each other, and the part at the end where Ray kind of brushes off the whole Victoria thing because that's love is just absolutely perfect.
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From: slidellra (slidellra@gmail.com)
Date: 01/02/2007 |
I went around much of the last week with the image of the shower scene stuck in my head (for some reason, Ray grinning to himself right before he notices Fraser REALLY works for me).
Also, great story. Such interesting push and pull between them, and you make the sexual tension and hotness so vivid that the reader shares Ray's frustration at the interruptions/running away. *rereads that* Not sure if I can put it well, meant that the hotness is hot, which is wonderful of course, but it's also effective for the story. Which is neat.
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From: brooklinegirl (brooklinegirl@rcn.com)
Date: 01/01/2007 |
oh, dude, I LOVED this. I love the whole set-up at the start, with the shower and the door, and I LOVE the history here, I really do, with the (omfgHOT) kiss that Fraser oh-so-crazily pushed away from. I love how that having happened sat there between them, slowly making Ray nuts. This was great, and the final line? Totally awesome.
YAY.
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From: buzzylittleb
Date: 01/01/2007 |
Joan, this rocked. I like that what Ray thought was the breaker turned out to make it for Fraser. I also now know what a lei is.
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From: A Kite (akite68163@aol.com)
Date: 01/01/2007 |
Oh, Joan! This was lovely. The idea of the cot breaking while Thatcher and Turnbull are running around stringing up flowers fills me with glee.
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From: Vee
Date: 12/28/2006 |
Some great zingy lines in this that remind me of the show. I love anything that gives Fraser a sense of humor. His skittishness feels genuine as well. Like Ray being the open, together, you're just a big chicken guy. Cute story!
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From: Isis (isis@arithmancy.net)
Date: 12/27/2006 |
Mmm, this was yummy. Pacing was perfect, and I totally loved the mirroring of Ray's early line by Fraser's at the end.
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From: Alexis
Date: 12/27/2006 |
Terrific - very funny and sexy and in-character for our boys. Love your Ray voice, and I really admire the way you plotted this out, structurally-speaking. I'm always in awe of people who can use flashback sequences that flow naturally along in the course of the narrative, and you handled that aspect very well. Great work!
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From: omphale23 (omphale23@gmail.com)
Date: 12/26/2006 |
This was great!
"Just another guy in the neighborhood, but a little more Ray's type than most (he wasn't sure what his type was any more. Fraser kind of threw that off, bending everything like a magnet.)"
He would, right? Everything Ray thinks that he wants is just a little bit tilted toward weird and Canadian.
And the idea of the two of them breaking the cot, while Turnbull and Thatcher are decorating? Truly awesome.
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From: J S Cavalcante (JSCavalcante@nycap.rr.com)
Date: 12/26/2006 |
Oh my God is that terrific. Hilarious and *clever* in the best way, and so well-written. So many great lines that I can't even pull one out to quote right now, and anyway Zebra already quoted some of my favorites. "The dashboard of Ray's life"--that whole metaphor was so RAY it was perfection. Fraser's charged-particles analogy was so *him*. The characterizations are spot-on. And, God, I'm a sucker for Ray convincing Fraser with a well-thought-out logical argument. I may have to come back and rave about this story again, because I'm incoherently in love with it.
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From: Zebra (zebra363@livejournal.com)
Date: 12/26/2006 |
Funny and moving with a great RayK voice. Great lines kept jumping out:
It was hard to picture Fraser doing anything normal like that. Maybe he was holding perfectly still, arms behind his back, or standing on one leg like a stork. (*g* *g* *g*)
He could ignore Fraser too, he could ignore Fraser with one hand tied behind his back. No problem.
It almost hurt how wrong that was, how not enough to explain the way Fraser had crept in to take over and be part of everything, the back of his mind, the way he looked at the world, like the dashboard of his life.
I liked Ray's vision of them 20 years in the future, too. And: "Now you try imagining two guys who really want to get it on, but one of them's a giant chicken."
Lovely!
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From: pearl (schmerica@gmail.com)
Date: 12/25/2006 |
Oh my gosh, this is AWESOME. Seriously, this is just jam-packed with excellent lines. Heart! ("Maybe he'd apologize and explain about how he had this terrible phobia where he was afraid of beds." OH RAY.)
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From: etben (et.ben.non@gmail.com)
Date: 12/24/2006 |
!!!!!!!!!
Oh, yay! I like this so much, you wouldn't even believe - it's Ray! and Fraser! and it's just - too awesome for WORDS. I love especially all of the little snippets of case-stuff you put in - the twins with the dachsunds! and thatcher and the leis! awesome, and just perfect for the show, all of these little references to the job and the real world, but that's just backstory to the relationship, and oh, wow, this is just the BEST.
...I may come back and try to be coherent about this later? but let's be honest: I like this so much that time will probably not make me any more able to speak English about it. Great job, o mystery writer - and now I want to know who you are, so I can flail all over you in person.
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From: Allison (shoemaster@livejournal.com)
Date: 12/24/2006 |
This rocks like a rocking thing. I love Ray's attitude and am proud of his ability to get laid elsewhere, while Fraser is being dum. The hints of zaneyness (sp?) are just endlessly amusing in how accepted they are. Of course there was a pair of identical twins with matching dachshunds, of course Ray got hit with the mud while Fraser remained spotless.
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