From: Erica (viciouswishes@yahoo.com)
Date: 01/13/2007 |
Excellent. I especially love the opening of this story in how the metaphor becomes reality and the ending how you bring it from reality to the metaphor again.
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From: Lucifercircle (luciferofthecircle@hotmail.com)
Date: 01/01/2007 |
I really liked Ray's awed reaction to the Kraken. And I liked Ray's thoughts on Fraser and his shut-off-ness. Your Ray voice is very good. Very nice!
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From: Vee
Date: 12/28/2006 |
Hmmm, trippy, dreamy goodness.
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From: Isis (isis@arithmancy.net)
Date: 12/27/2006 |
Aw, this was sweet and fun. I liked the metaphor and I loved the tentacles.
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From: ldthomps (ldthomps@gmail.com)
Date: 12/27/2006 |
Wow, that was gorgeous! Here via moosesal, and you wrote it so well for her, including Sex Pistols and science. Fun plot, and lovely exposition of Fraser in Ray's voice. Loved the Ray "cryptic zoologist".
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From: Alexis
Date: 12/27/2006 |
This was very, very interesting. Great use of extended metaphor, and I was so happy to see Ray and Fraser back in a submarine together. Thanks so much for posting this!
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From: Alexis (alexis.muirhead@gmail.com)
Date: 12/26/2006 |
Very nice! Good use of the metaphor, and really, really well written. Lovely stuff.
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From: moosesal (moosesal@gmail.com)
Date: 12/26/2006 |
I love this. It's so sweet and lovely and the idea of the two of them on a sub again just makes me so very, very happy.
The metaphor of getting through Fraser's shell of ice works really well, it's smooth and careful rather than beating the reader over the head. Nicely done.
And yay Dief for going after help. ;-)
Thank you so much.
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From: joandarck (joandarck@gmail.com)
Date: 12/26/2006 |
It's hard to express why I loved this. I mean, good lines earlier and such, but it's above all the way you take the kraken, which would normally have been just a Random Whimsical Plot Device, and turn it into this revealing character thing and this symbol that feels wildly meaningful without being obvious, as in dreams, and this dark, dreamlike scene in general.
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From: shell (umbo@livejournal.com)
Date: 12/24/2006 |
I've been reading stories for at least a couple hours now, off and on, and this is the first one I absolutely *had* to comment on, because it's beautiful. Well done.
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